Setting
is integral to story, just as the characters and plot/theme are. Setting is about
balance: you don’t want to give too little description and you don’t want to
overdo it.
Setting
is where the story and each scene take place, which you know. But do you grasp
that setting can set the tone and mood readers experience, and can reveal and
or trigger characters’ moods? You want to give enough (not too much)
description for each scene to set the appearance, atmosphere, and mood for
readers so they are clear enough in their own minds about the general or
specific image you intend for them to have. It may help to create a list or
essay description for your scenes (like a character sketch) and keep these handy
so you stay consistent throughout the scenes and story.
Give
places texture through description.
Here’s an example from a James Lee Burke novel:
“They drove back onto the four-lane
and crossed the bridge over the wide sweep of the Atchafalaya River .
From the bridge’s apex, Morgan City looked like
a Caribbean port, with its palm-dotted
streets, red-tiled roofs, biscuit-colored stucco buildings, and shotgun houses
fronted by ceiling-high windows and ventilated green shutters.”
As I
said, it doesn’t have to be overdone, just give readers something that helps
them form an adequate image in their minds and sets mood and atmosphere—and
gives them a sense of place.
Here’s another
example from a James Lee Burke novel that puts “place” to where his main
character lives:
“I drove home at 5 p.m. and parked my
pickup truck under the porte cochere
attached to the shotgun house where Molly and I live in what is called the
historical district of New Iberia. Our home is a modest one compared to the
Victorian and antebellum structures that define most of East Main, but
nonetheless it is a beautiful old place, built of cypress and oak, long and
square in shape, like a boxcar, with high ceilings and windows, a small gallery
and peaked tin roof, and ventilated green shutters that you can latch over the
glass during hurricane season.
The flower beds are planted with
azaleas, lilies, hibiscus, philodendron, and rosebushes in the sun and
caladiums and hydrangeas in the shade. The yard is over an acre in size and
covered with pecan trees, slash pine, and live oaks. The back of the property
slopes down to the Teche, and late at night barges and tugboats with green and
red running lights drone heavily through the drawbridge at Burke Street on their way to Morgan City . At early
dawn there is often ground fog in the trees and on the bayou, and inside it you
can sometimes hear a gator flopping or ducks wimpling the shallows.”
You want
to make the inner and outer landscapes in your story as real as possible for
readers. You want readers to feel as if they’ve been there, to feel connection
to the story through location. They want to feel this, too. If you intend to or
are writing a series with the same character or characters, you will have to describe
some settings (and character descriptions) in each book, when appropriate, but with
only enough information to give adequate description to new readers and refresh
memories for those who follow the series.
A
character’s scene setting can influence or reveal something about his or her
internal landscape, as well. How you do this is more important than what you
use to do it with. Here’s an example from an Elizabeth George novel (British—so
spellings of some words are different):
She parked the
Mini with one of its front tyres on the kerb and went to see what the
Breakwater had to offer. Not much, she discovered, a fact that other diners
must have been aware of, because although it was the dinner hour, she found
herself alone in the restaurant. She chose a table near the door in the hope of
catching an errant sea breeze should one fortuitously decide to blow. She
plucked the laminated menu from its upright position next to a vase of plastic
carnations. After using it to fan herself for a minute, she gave it a look-over
and decided that the Mega-Meal was not for her despite its bargain price (£5.50
for port sausage, bacon, tomato, eggs, mushrooms, steak, frankfurter, kidney,
hamburger, lamb chops, and chips). She settled on the restaurant’s declared
specialty: buck rarebit. She placed her order with a teenaged waitress sporting
an impressive blemish precisely in the middle of her chin, and a moment later
she saw that the Breakwater Restaurant was going to provide her with its own
form of one-stop shopping. [My note:
She found a current newspaper with an article she needed to read on the front
page.]
Look at
the extraordinary amount of information revealed in that paragraph. You get a
sense of so many things: what a traditional or culture-based meal might
include; approximate time of day; either she’s a poor car parker or didn’t
bother about parking better on this occasion (has a lot on her mind, perhaps; but
if she does this often, you have a sense of what kind of ride her Mini is and
its condition); she picked a place to eat that obviously is not a local favorite
(is her choice because of location, unfamiliarity with the area, that’s she’s
on a tight budget, is a spendthrift?); it’s hot as heck—she sat by the window,
hoping for a breeze; the description of the menu (laminated) and the plastic
carnations give visual images and an indication about what kind of place this
is (service and food quality); she finds something there she needs other than
just something to eat: a current newspaper. Of course, if you read this
particular novel or the series it’s part of, you know the answers to the
questions in parentheses; but you can see how much information is provided by
setting the scene, even in one paragraph.
Always
give readers a physical location to “land” in (including an address with a
made-up numeral; though, a numeral isn’t always needed, as in the Burke
example). You can boost sense of place if you use street names and highway
names and their numbers—to make the story more realistic for readers. For
example, Rex Stout placed the house of his orchid-growing detective, Nero
Wolfe, at an address on West 35th
Street in Manhattan .
The number part of the address, if real, would be in the Hudson River, but even
though some readers may be aware of this (or not), they can identify with the
surroundings or look up the street on a map so they get a sense of the
neighborhood and where it fits in the layout of Manhattan. You may also have to
make up brick-and-mortar businesses, etc., but keep these as realistically
located as possible, if you’re using a real location.
How you
handle setting matters because clarity is imperative. Everything you write
creates a sequence of scenes in the minds of readers—they are experiencing a
number of things simultaneously, so you must present them with information in a
proper, reliable order. It’s mind-boggling as a reader (and as a developmental
editor) to approach a scene and have the terrain alter from the original image
the writer created in your mind as you move through the scene. One client
didn’t have a particular scene setting clear in his mind, so just kept adding
what he thought would be interesting or challenging for the characters in the
scene (I was utterly confused about what the setting was supposed to look like,
which I explained to the client). This kind of disorganized, willy-nilly scene
creation makes readers (and editors) feel as though they were plucked from a
stable environment and dropped into an altered reality. Unless your novel is
about altered realities, don’t do this to readers; and if it is, make sure you
do this with skill and clarity. Also don’t have what characters need appear out
of thin air. Say a character needs a hammer. Unless you’ve set up where the
character gets the hammer from, don’t have one appear in his or her hand from nowhere (unless your character is a
magician or wizard). Everything has to be logical, even in Science Fiction and
Fantasy.
One thing
you might do is take photos of exact locations or locations that resemble ones
you wish to create or use in your story, including exterior and interior photos
(get permission, if needed—but notes can always be made without permission).
This way, you have references you can pull from for descriptions and how scenes
unfold when the terrain is important to the scene. (Most businesses won’t mind
if you give them good promotion in your novel, but they will mind if you
don’t—so make one up, if it plays a negative role in the story.)
You want
settings to be as clear and real as possible for readers so you maintain the
integrity of the story and readers’ ability to follow and connect with the
story, scene by scene.
I wish
you the best with your writing, process, and progress.
Joyce
Shafer
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